Hi I had an assignment for my ap english class and i decided to write a poem what do you think? Is it good so far ? I need to use examples of figurative language i only used to so far im not finished yet. Also this poem is based on the book enriques journey. Its about a boy who immigrates to america to find his mom who abandoned him when he was little.
Poem:
I am longing to have you by my side every night. The memories we shared together are an absence in my mind. The sense of my loneliness is powerful and i wish to be with you some day. I know the journey will be venturous but my desire to have your affection is stronger than my fear. The burdenesome pain that flickers is a never ending notion. Only if i find you and we reunite will i ever feel whole. Your absence has made me a brittle stone.
I'm not quite finished i think im going to add or three more sentences any feed back btw im 16
Update:thank you so much first answer! i have been abandoned by my father so maybe i just expressed my feelings through poetry unconciously thank you!:)
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you have a lot of potential going for you you have a good head on your shoulders,i doubt if you can get anything better than what you already wrote,it's what you feel in your heart and sometimes experience lets you bring out the words that would otherwise may have been hidden.keep up the good work
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