My family consists of my father, my mother, my two brothers and my two dogs. My mom is called Maria and my dad is called Ruben. My minor brother is called Dante and my major brother is called Lucas and my name is Federico and I'm seventeen years old.
Ok, we are a united family and we live in Argentina for forty years. My mother was born in Mexico and my dad was born in Uruguay, they met on a bus that was going to Bs.As, They looked mutually and they smiled. When they got off the bus, my mom at that time she was eighteen years old and invited to my dad to walk around the city. Was at that time when my dad fell in love with my mom, they kissed and the next year was born my major brother, he was a blonde and fat baby, but tender. After three years, I was born in a public hospital; I was a thin and white baby. And after four years came my minor brother, he was a dark-haired baby.
The other day I was thinking that someday all of us will be old and we'll have grandchildren and our children were taking care of us as we take care of them. And then we'll die of some disease and our children will cry for us.
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My family is composed by my father, my mother, my two brothers and my two dogs. My mother is called Maria and My dad is called Ruben. My little brother is called Dante and My eldest brother is called Lucas. My name is Federico. I´m seventeen years old.
Well, We are a united family. We lived in Argentina for forty years. My mother was born in Mexico, My dad was born in Uruguay. They met on a bus that was going to Buenos Aires. They looked at each other and smiled. When they got off the bus, My mom who was eighteen years old, invited to my dad to walk around the city. It was back then when my dad fell in love my mom. They kissed and the next year, My eldest brother was born. He was a blond and fat baby, but he was also tender. Three years later, I was born in a public hospital; I was a thin and a white skin baby. Four years later my little brother was born. He was a dark hair baby.
A day I was thinking about that someday We all will be old, and we´ll have grandchildren and, our children will be taking care of us, as we will be taking care of them. We´ll die because some disease and our children will mourn for us.
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Bueno, esa es la manera correcta de escribir tu redaccion, en la anterior respuestas vi mas errores que en el tuyo (con todo respeto con ella)...sii no me crees te puedo explicar algunos de los que veo aca rapidamente:
EJ:
"and our children will cry for us"
Cry = Llorar (sin un motivo)...
Mourn = Llorar por la muerte de alguien, o un dolor (sentimental)...
"The other day"
Eso quiere decir...El otro dia...pero diciendo "este dia no, otro"
si kieres decir...el otro dia estaba pensando...lo correcto es "A day I was thinking" = A day = Un dia cualquiera
"we'll die of some disease"
La manera correcta de decirlo....es We´ll die "because" some disease
Por que es el porque se muere...por la enfermedad...because disease....
No "of some disease" eso es demasiado literal
Entre muchos otros...pero espero que sea suficiente...ii que mi respuesta te ayude.
Un consejo, No uses tanto el "and" le da un toque demasiado "coloquial" algo asi. Ok, reemplazalas por comas, o puntos.
Bye! Take care!
My family consists of my father, my mother, my two brothers, and my two dogs. My mom's name is Maria and my dad's name is Ruben. My younger brother's name is Dante and my oldest brother's name is Lucas. My name is Federico and I'm seventeen years old.
Well, we are a united family and have lived in Argentina for forty years. My mother was born in Mexico, and my dad was born in Uruguay. They met on a bus that was going to Bs.As. They looked at each other and smiled. When they got off of the bus, my mom, who was eighteen years old at that time, invited my dad to walk around the city. It was at that time that my dad fell in love with my mom. They kissed and in the next year my oldest brother was born, who was a blonde and fat baby, but tender. Three years later, I was born in a public hospital; I was a white, thin baby. After four years, my youngest brother was born, he was dark-haired baby.
The other day I was thinking that some day all of us will be old and we'll have grandchildren. Also, our children will be taking care of us and we'll take of them. Then, we'll die of some disease and our children will cry for us.