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I like this...but your style changed for a few lines in the middle; it broke the hard-running flow. Also the periodic capitalization breaks the flow a bit.

Don't get me wrong, I think this is wonderful! I'm just looking at your work as many look at mine. This is a great read...with much strength behind it.

My love is gone for you mommy, you could ride in hearses

I'm sick in the brain dumb *****, can you nurse this?

You told me life would never, ever, ever get this perfect

Then you smoke a J of weed, and take his kids to the churches

Uh, **** church, they singin' and the **** ain't even worth it

In the choir, whores and liars, scumbags and the dirt, *****

You told me God was the answer

When I ask him for ****, I get no answer, so God is the cancer

I'm stuck in triangles, lookin' for my angel

Kill me with a chainsaw, and let my balls dangle

Triple six is my number, you can get it off my Tumblr

It honestly doesn't sound like a poem to me...

But I think it's good!

My one suggestion would be to eliminate or change the second line because it sounds almost exactly like the first.

Good Job!

I tried yelling at Iceland to scare it away from europe, but unfortunately it's still at the same goddamn place.

Words don't ruin things. People do.