into the infinite cyber
into the infinite cyber, i moan
my verbal skills i repeatedly hone
learning to complain with no whiny tone
and to use intellectual treasures
for something more than physical pleasures
possibly even some validation
and ranting against pussification
into the infinite cyber, i play
my emotions like a waterfall spray
off a goliath, grainy granite gray
spanning humanities entire range
desire to despair, self doubt's not that strange
mem'ries of pleasures unforgettable
nightmares of mistakes most regrettable
into the infinite cyber, i stare
life lessons i've learned with others i share
without defense i leave psyche bare
accepting judgment, improvements sustained
those few dreams despite disasters retained
diligently still being worked toward
constantly keeping my focus forward
into the infinite cyber, a friend
iambic prayers i dutifully send
(to a GOD i think's probably pretend)
trespasses carnal please kindly forgive
the life i felt my weak flesh had to live
of all my sins i completely repent
excepting those i'm about to commit
Billy Smith
Answers & Comments
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Put me in the opining category. This is completely apologetic and self-indulgent. Before you bristle know that I think all art is based on self indulgence in one or the other senses. I love this work you have made. The rhythm employed in self-examination captivated me _ and I identified with the point of view. Your word usage was intelligent and I, as a reader, admired the brain behind the words.
You are skilled at consonance and employ it to great effect.
Only one thing really bothered me - and that is the neologism - "pussification". I hate the euphemism it is derived from and feel that your made up word weakens your otherwise quite strong work.
Edit please - -I mean your question was apologetic - and also I think self-indulgence is not a bad thing if art comes from it. Art is an essential part of being human.
Just wanted to clarify.
Hey there, Billy! I think this is a really good poem. After I read it a couple of times I realized there is much truth to your writing. It applies to most of us that are on the internet. The last stanza was quite powerful.
Doggerel? You must have been attacked by Peter...
I liked it, especially the last 2 lines. Funny